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Sam Redlark's avatar

This could be/may well be part of a novel, though it works equally well as a short story where as much is inferred as is told outright.

That I always intuitively search for frames of reference is probably due to a lifelong exposure to music journalism where comparisons to other bands form part of the critical shorthand (the old warhorse 'like {insert band name] on acid!'). Your extended family beset by biblical plagues and the ripples of political unrest reminded me of the Daniel Clowes graphic novel, David Boring, in particular those chapters where the protagonist and assortment of other waifs and strays find themselves marooned in a house on a small island, where they have taken refuge from a terrorist attack that may or may not have rendered mainland America uninhabitable.

There is one sentence that confuses me, though that may well be because I have failed to understand it:

"Something incised itself on her face then, an anguish, that one has not heard but not understood."

Should it perhaps be "that one has heard but not understood"?

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Lion Summerbell's avatar

Hey, Sam! First, wanted to say thanks for that very kind review. And as for the tricky sentence, while I wish I could claim it was a double bluff, the fact is that you caught some good old-fashioned errata. I owe you an extra thanks for the copy editing. I read the piece you published today (really enjoyed it—really) and had some thoughts I wanted to put together for a comment. Just have to get through one busy day and the next.

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